Thread:Zillafire101/@comment-1370845-20120905215924

All right mate, first off I'm sorry about the episode that happened but like you said I'm pretty sure we can move past it. You've said you'd prefer if we gave constructive criticism, so I'll give it a bit here:


 * 1) The obvious mentioned one is the unoriginality, alhthoug Moet's blog and the whole discussion have pretty much summed everything I have to say. Hey, it's not too late to change the character without even changing the names. Many real science fictions use names from others, as a nod/reference to the inspiration.
 * 2) A major issue with your fiction seems to be the lack of presentation. It can be difficult for people to take fictions seriously if they aren't well written.
 * 3) The layouts of your pages I find cluttered, fairly weak and difficult to gather desired information from. That's why I have more organised section layouts on my pages, which are consistent (many otherusers follow my layout, but Cyrannian and Wormulon have both made their own, which are still well organised).
 * 4) Personally I find the pages quite poorly written grammatically. You seem to have gotten better, but taking time an care when typing can be the way forward.
 * 5) One thing wth Phase Hunter's page, I find some of the quotes and some of the relations a little immature looking presentation wise, whch is why I find it difficult to take the character seriously.
 * 6) Aside from that, get out more. Get involved in fictions, get more established, all these sorts of things, and you're well on your way.

Just thought I'd say this :) 