Board Thread:Fiction Universe Discussion/@comment-4242472-20140911152808/@comment-1370845-20140911162216

I don't really see anything wrong with the current one. It is informative, concise and a useful summary. In general, the page is well designed already (other than the Navigation h1). To be more helpful in my response;

The Draconid Imperium is an extensive and mighty superpower that dominates in the, although its territory extends beyond. In addition to its impressive fleet being among many that represent the power of the, the Draconid Imperium is one of the most cultured and traditional states in the region of space, with its founding members, the , carrying on many traditions in a more modern setting, while being a powerhouse and a behemoth of industry.

In addition to its culture and strength making it a memorable superpower, the Draconid Imperium is also one of the more ancient members of the Commonwealth. Being well over 250,000 years old, the Imperium has been led for eons by the "Paragons", whom are close to divinity, and ministered by the Grand Senate on. Although the Imperium presents itself as one of the more bold, mighty and majestic nations, they are not without their faults and dark secrets, for within the state lies greed and corruption between the ever-conflicting political houses.

How's that?