Fiction talk:Eldarisian Empire

Its a good start...
...But it would certainly benefit from a few changes. For example I had a very hard time reading due to the lack of punctuation and the general rapid nature of your writing; Splitting it into smaller paragraphs would help also. I would assess your fiction, but right now its very difficult because of the grammar; So, good start, but I'd organize it a bit better.

Ze Battul Medick! (talk) 03:02, March 7, 2014 (UTC)Operation Marines