Thread:KingSparta300/@comment-5714344-20130307072621/@comment-5714344-20130307233251

It's better, but a few things.

1: If they are tier 3, they should not be able to create a planet of pure energy. You really are cutting it close making them balls of energy at all, but you can only get away with it if they cannot do anything that a tier 3 empire cannot do. Hence, no energy planets or galaxies as anything but long-term plans they hope to put into action eventually, and you'll need to explain how they turn things into the same sort of energy that they are, Wormy is the one to help you with that.

2: While you're at it, explain what type of energy they are. I can conceive of a substance that, for some reason, is properly considered energy instead of matter, but you should elaborate on its nature. Again, I suggest wormy.

3: If their planet is in an intergalactic void, they should take decades or centuries to reach the Milky Way. I recommend that you put their planet in the Katar sector, and, as I suggested, make it a normal planet.

4: Do not say that just 2 Immaculate are smarter than most intelligent minds. I'd recommend toning that down.

5: Explain how they reproduce, not just the result.

6: Fix the grammar. I recommend you type everything in Microsoft Word beforehand, then post it. If you want, you can let it sit for a few days and come back to it. That helps you catch things that read awkwardly.

7: You need to make them easier to kill. There is no magic in the main universe so currently they have to fall into a black hole. I recommend that, in your description of the type of energy they are you ensure that there is a way to kill them with bullets, stabbing objects etc.

All in all, here is my recommendation. Have them not destroy planets and make them energy, but individual life-forms or objects. Perhaps they tend to invade a planet and turn its citizens into energy beings, which may or may not be sapient or sentient.

Other than that though, they should function like a normal empire. They live on and colonize planets, and they use normal technology. Your tier is currently low enough to comply with the rules, but I recommend making it even lower.