Thread:KingSparta300/@comment-5714344-20130307072621/@comment-6752454-20130312174900

Here's a breakdown of your fiction and some suggestions to improve it.

First of all, a Type IV civ? do you realize what that means? "While not gods in a religious sense, these uber civilizations have mastery over space and time, and control over huge superclusers of galaxies." "These civilizations could create baby universes, and control the motions of entire galaxy clusters." "Tremendous power, including rings of superstrings (leading to new universes) and creating galactic scale weapons." Anything high than Type II would be too much at this point.

Next up, "Pure Energy"? I'm sorry to break this to you, but that defies the laws of physics. Matter is required for energy to exist, and then there's the countless physics issues of being made of energy.

"Notable for Destroying hundreds of non-energy races." Ok, sorry but that's seems a little too much.

"Alignment Lawful Evil - Chaotic Neutral" Those are almost completely different ends of the spectrum, with almost nothing in common.

"They fact that they immortal, and can only die by Essence and Black holes," That's it? That's next to nothing. Way too OP.

"Though little is known about them, Early Immaculate history confirms that they destroyed all non-energy life in their galaxy, which was destroyed during the Annihilation. Their homeworld was lift untouched by it" I'm not even going to discuss this...

"Recently, they have set their sights upon the milky way, and are making their way towards it, with the soul intent of destroying all that is not an energy being, and transforming it into a new 'energy galaxy', with which they will use to destroy all non-energy life." With their current size? The Milky way galaxy has 400-600 MILLION stars, and many civilizations who could swat you like a fly. Consider that.

"The Biology of the Immaculate is interesting, as they are pure energy being, which means that they are immune to energy weapons. They seem to be a mixture between electrical energy, nuclear energy, and solar energy." Discussed this already.

"They reproduce in a incredible fashion: each and every Immaculate creates five new ones by cloning themselves, with the clones then making five clones each, and finally at least 150 new immaculate are born when it ends." And how is that supposed to work?

"Some Immaculate have ascended into a god-like state, becoming Divine Immaculate." And I'll stop you right there. I think gods have already been explained to you.

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