Thread:ColliNOS/@comment-4991685-20160715200937/@comment-4991685-20160715210751

Right- well, immediately I can identify a lot of mistakes and issues with your fiction. Don't take offense to this, as this sort of thing happens to every new users and even some older users make mistakes. If you could come on to the IRC channel, I could explain a bit better and a bit further, and walk you through how to fix stuff.