Fiction talk:The Battle of Sporadia

My Advice
Ox, here's the thing with the beginning of the story. You musn't start a story with "A long time ago..." or something like that. If it is a comedy, then you could put that in as a reference to Star Wars. But with this, it's not a galactic war, it's a civil war. I'd start with "Many years ago, on a planet known as Sporadia-1, war has broken out between the Sporox. The leaders of the two sides have made allies and are currently developing war technology." That is a good start. In a civil war story in the civ stage, you must start from the beginning. Lucario of the Gods (talk | contributions) 14:59, May 10, 2010 (UTC)