Fiction talk:Eldarisian Empire

Its a good start...
...But it would certainly benefit from a few changes. For example I had a very hard time reading due to the lack of punctuation and the general rapid nature of your writing; Splitting it into smaller paragraphs would help also. I would assess your fiction, but right now its very difficult because of the grammar; So, good start, but I'd organize it a bit better.

Ze Battul Medick! (talk) 03:02, March 7, 2014 (UTC)Operation Marines

Just a message
I just wanted to say, that you have a very good piece of fiction here. I hope to work with you in the future, now that your in the Mirus.

Zillafire101 (talk) 06:13, February 18, 2015 (UTC)

Incoming Transmission from the Grand Spodist Church - Eldarisian Channel
''Our apologies for the late response, we recently had a terrifying bureaucratic incident in which a hacker found a previously unknown exploit in our mainframe and used it to change the folder names for all of our diplomatic documents to "lol u nubs get rekd". Our apologies again.''

''While we have no need for your heathen religion, we can grant you as much passage as is necessary to conduct trade with French Bunsen via the Wormhole Network, and we will restrict access beyond that. Whether any planets that are along the corridor that we grant are to conduct trade with your vessels, that is up to the planetary governments; we will not restrict trade but at the same time, planetary governments are free to make their own decision regarding your trade. Perhaps this first step of cooperation will transform into a more robust relationship in the future.''

''But do not send your heathen missionaries to our worlds. We will cast them out. And if they insist on staying, we will salt them, burn them, tar and feather them, and then shoot them out of a vortex cannon into the nearest blue giant. Do not say that we did not warn you.''

Peace be with you.

-Divine Regent Kasmir IV of the 

Incoming transmission from the Diplomatic Corp of the Sovereign Caribbean Federation
The head of the Party was favourable to establish diplomacy with the Cultists. A space of land on Santiago de Cristobal will be accorded for you to estalish a Diplomatic Mission.