Fiction talk:The spartan republic

Oh dear...
Check out this page to see the proper layout... and to understand why saying they defeated the Cyranus could be taken in a bad manner.

Also... are these descendants of humans? If so, it's fine, but if not, you will need to alter their past quite a bit.

Finally, you need to repair the grammar. I'm not the worlds greatest grammar guy, but even I know this needs work...

Always Confused, MasterMachine -Hakuna Matata, what a wonderful phrase!- 16:08, March 12, 2012 (UTC)