Fiction talk:Jarga Empire of Lerriox

Erm...
Hey, uh, buddy, your tier there's a little... wonky. As in, way too high for a starter fiction. You might wanna lower it to something like 4 or 3.5. I should also add I have something of a beef with this line;

"The Jargas of Lerriox are an extremely dominant force on the western edge of the Milky Way Galaxy. They are feared by all who come in contact with them..."

While it isn't not allowed to say stuff like that, it grinds my gears when I see people write that on there first fiction. In my experience, a reputation is earned. And plus I find boasting about a reputation (especially as your first line!) is a little bit in bad taste. :P

Now I don't want you to feel like I'm critisizing, because I'm not, really. I just feel like there are things you could fix.

Ze Battul Medick! (talk) 14:32, July 31, 2013 (UTC)Operation Marines